Project 2 Workshop

Rachel Surgent

1. The style is short story.

2. Yes. I didn't find any sentence level errors. It has no title, but I would recommend: Stage Pride. I am not sure. No. When they announce the winner. When the paragraphs change I have some trouble understanding what's going on (but that could just be me being dumb).

3. Maybe explaining a little bit more about what is going on when you change between moments would be helpful.

4. Rachel Surgent’s paper is a short story. It was very well written and had really good grammar. She did a very good job describing what the place she was in and also describing her feelings in specific moments. The only thing I would say that needs some work is her transition between moments.

Clarissa Rios

1. Personal Essay is the style.

2. Yes. I think I just saw a few sentence level errors. The title is good but it makes it sound like it was not a personal essay. 3 times. She is talking about church. The part of the gay friend. None.

3. It was pretty good, but some parts seem like it is not a personal essay.

4. Clarissa Rios did a good job writing her essay. Her points are clear and she explains things well. Only thing I would say is theta some parts feel like an argumentative essay instead of a personal essay.